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Band 4

The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The
traffic
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 jam is one of the most serious problems
and
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, and
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according to
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 some
people
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people,
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 the most effective solution for
this
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 issue is provided free use of public transportation
regardless
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at regardless
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time
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times
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.
While
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 I accept
with
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apply
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this
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 suggestion, I am more convinced that public transportation should not be used without any charge. On the one hand, some people consider that
free-use
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free use
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 of public transportation is the greatest way because of the following reasons. Talking about the first reason, the main cause of the establishment of
traffic
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 congestion is private
transportations
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transportation
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. A typical example of
this
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, Viet Nam, which contains a huge number of personal
transportations
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transportation
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 users, often
suffer
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suffers
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 from massive
traffic
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 congestion. If everybody stops using their own cars or motorcycles in order to
involve in
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use
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 free public
transport
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using
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apply
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, the rate of
traffic
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jam
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jams
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 can be considerably decreased.
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, I strongly disagree with
this
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 statement for a number of
grounds
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reasons
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. First of all, the governments need to spend a huge amount of money to make free public
transport
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happens
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happen
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, the
governments
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government's
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fund
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funds
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is
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are
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 not unlimited, so if they concentrate on investing in
this
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 field, other essential factors are gonna be overlooked and underestimated.
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, there are millions of public transports in one country, so
that
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apply
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the government funding is going to
be running
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 out in a small period of time.
Secondly
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, people tend to use free products
so
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 if free public
transport
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 actually exists, there are gonna be an enormous number of users, which
lead
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leads
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 to
over-using
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overusing
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 and many other serious problems
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such
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, such
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 as thieves.
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, my hometown swimming pool used to be free to use
,
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;
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however
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, now it is not free anymore because it is too crowded and often
receive
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receives
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 reports of the disappearance of
costumers
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customers
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 items and the pool facilities, so I do not encourage the publication of the free public
transport
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 system.

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overview
Make a clear intro with your view and plan what you will say.
coherence
Keep one idea in each paragraph and make a link to the next idea.
development
Only use ideas that fit the task and avoid off topic links.
language
Check grammar and use small, easy words so not to miss the message.
stance
You show a clear view that you disagree with the plan.
content
You give reasons for your view and add a local example.
structure
You try to compare sides, which helps the task.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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