Most high level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

In corporate offices, a lot of high profile positions are managed by male authorities even though more than half of the working staff is female in developed countries.
This
essay will discuss the fact that
corporates
of or belonging to a corporation
corporate
should allot a specific percentage of managerial positions to women and I agree to
this
statement
.
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.
A famous proverb saying that ’Womens’s are the best creation of God’. The primary reason that why companies should allot some specific percentage of positions to female because of their analytical
thinking behavior
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thinking, behaviour
thinking behaviour
and I agree to the statement because in my opinion they are very smart thinker and they
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
every aspect of business in a technical way keeping in mind both pros and cons of the deal.
For
example
Chanda Koccher
,
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,
the CEO OF ICICI BANK INDIA has left the world astonished by their remarkable journey in
banking sector
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the banking sector
.
In
addition every
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addition, every
sector in the world is ruled by the women
for
example
Lata Mangeshkar the singing sensation, Smriti Irani in
political sector
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the political sector
. Another reason that why
organization
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an organization
organizations
the organization
should focus on hiring
female workforce
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a female workforce
is because of their
hardworking
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hard working
,
loyalty
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loyal
and extreme patience nature. They know very well how to tackle the difficult situations at times and bring out with them each possible solution. Women’s are no way less to the men in handling high profile positions.
For
example
Nita Ambani
,
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,
being the principle of Ambani school has set an
example
that a homemaker can
also
run a big entrepreneur. To conclude
,
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,
In my believe Corporates should give few high positions to women
also
as they are
equal
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equally
competent
in contrast
to men.
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