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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Like it is generally agreed always, on a
continuously
seemingly without interruption
continually
 changing
world
, ways of affecting people can be shaped various. Peoples that are living on the planet with an advanced media industry consume visually products rather than written things.
This
 essay will argue why some people
have been choosing
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have chosen
 from new kind of technologies about communicating from
visual kind
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the visual kind
 of things
such
 as photography or film and why the written things
such
 as mail and newspaper always will be chosen by
old
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older
the older
 generations and will not to be chosen by
young
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younger
 generations. As a matter of fact, in a new brave
world
,
people
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peoples
peoples'
 behaviours are changing. Human
instinct loves
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instinct, loves
 to express his/her personality with communicating tools to other
humans which
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humans, which
 are their friends, relatives, neighbours or communities that have contacts with
his
that male; objective male pronoun
him
/her. And an impressive video, picture or photo may cause an effect more than a long written essay about himself or herself. If we think social media
that is
 a very good example of
this
, one picture can tell us a lot of thoughts, feelings and ideas swiftly because time is the key element of
this
 generation. They do not want to lose time for anything like takes fifteen minutes or half an hour for reading something. A shot will give you the idea or feeling in seconds.
However
, some people from older generations never abandon the idea of the best way to telling a story is
writing
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written
.
For instance
, all good books are written. Of course, reading a book will take time but, most of the people who love to read see that like a pleasure of life.
Also
 reading a newspaper can be a pleasure for some
people
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people, for
for example
 on the bus while going to a job. So it depends on what kind of habits or addictions do you have about contacting people. The modern
world
 and older
world
 react differently
on
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to
this
 situation.
This
 essay argued that, on a changing modern
world
, people need to understand that the admires of generations could be questionable from which side do you want to look, some say speed is everything so we need to use visual tools to communicate,
on the other hand
, some say old school always the best so we need to use already known way to contact and no need to hurry. In my opinion
that is
 a choice which people decide by himself or herself through the way of desires of human nature.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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