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In many Countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the action of inhaling and exhaling the smoke of the tobacco or drug is considered as a crime at the present time for that reason
this
 activity is prohibited by many nations’ governments’ around the world.
This
 essay completely agrees with
this
 statement because smoking the cause of many health problems and it create an
air
pollution
. The act of smoking injures our fitness the reason for
this
 the cigarette is one kind of poison for human beings anatomy.
Furthermore
, it is creating a complication in respiratory process and might be possible to cause a lung cancer.
For example
, By the survey of Indian government’s Medical department at 2009 in that 80% people were addicted
for
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to
 smoking tobacco or Drugs, Compared with 60% men and women has suffered with health problems like Lung cancer, asthma, tuberculosis,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
.
Accept space
.
 So, if governments of many united are
ban
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banned
 on smoking in public place.
Thus
, It is completely
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 and valuable decision. Smoking is one of the major
reason
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reasons
 behind
air
pollution
 at public places because, The activity of exhaling the smoke of
cigar
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a cigar
cigars
the cigar
 is left in
air
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the air, then
the air then
then
this
 will mix with normal
air
 and create a pollute
air
that is
 very harmful
for
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to
 human being as well as trees
also
.
For instance
, Report of 2009 by the
pollution
 control department of Gujarat, declared 20% people have suffered
air
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air pollution problems
pollution
 problem at railway station, parks, Bus station, etc. So, prohibited smoking at public places by authorities’ of states, It is good for the people.
Moreover
, For kids and senior citizens
also
 who has allergy with smoking the smoke. In conclusion, according to my view that
statement it
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statement, it
 is completely justified because the weed on public areas are not good for persons
also
 it can be made an
air
pollution
. .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • prevalence
  • respiratory issues
  • environmental pollution
  • litter
  • healthcare costs
  • smoking-induced illnesses
  • encourage smokers to quit
  • public health improvement
  • justified
  • public spaces
  • exposure
  • non-smokers
  • inconvenience
  • younger populations
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