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human activity has had a negative impacts in plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others belive actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discus both and give your opinion

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People
Suggestion
Peoples'
Peoples
 actions had a detrimental impacts in plants and animals around the globe. Few people thought
this
 cannot be changed and I agree with that, as the
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 of people is changed, the advancement in industries demanding deforestation, and hobbies of hunting animals. While other believed that some action should be taken to bring about the change, like implementing SOPs and taking strict action against people not following rules. On the one hand, some people thinks that the adverse activities of the people that affecting plants and animals cannot be changed and I agree with that, due the change is life-style of the people the demand of woods are increasing day by day which promoting deforestation, as we all know that trees are the main sources of providing woods and in order to full fill the requirement, industries bound to cut trees which directly affect plants and animals.
Moreover
, peoples habits of hunting animals just for the sake of enjoyment is increasing, because the people
hunts
Suggestion
hunt
 animals and post their pictures
in
Suggestion
on
 the social media site like, twitter, Facebook, and Instagram, and indirectly encourage other people to do the same.
On the other hand
, other people believed that some actions should be taken in order to control people’s actions of harming plants and animals.
For instance
,
State
Suggestion
the State
 ought to make proper standard operating procedures
on
Suggestion
for
 protecting the plants and animals and take strict actions against people that are not following the rules and regulation of the state.
Furthermore
, there should be proper implementations of existing laws related to the wildlife and plants
by
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in
 the state in order protect both plants and animals
for
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from
 being harmed by
foolish actions
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the foolish actions
 of people, as they kill the plants and animals just for the sake of their entertainment. In conclusion, while people have different opinions, I believed that it is impossible to change people’s actions, as we cannot forfeit our luxurious
life-style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
lifestyles
.
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