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In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays people store knowledge on the Internet. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days
Internet
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the Internet
 plays a vital role as a means of keeping and delivering the
knowledge
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 while books did in the past.
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 storing
information
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 in books is preferred by some people, I strongly believe that storing
knowledge
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 online will be more beneficial.
This
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 essay will highlight those views and reasons behind my thoughts. On the one hand, some people argue that storing
information
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 or
knowledge
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 on paper has its own merits. They are likely to love the smell of paper and the texture when they read. Those who prefer carrying books to searching online tend to think it has the value of owning a book.
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, those who love books love to
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get or gather together
collect
 them as a hobby. It reflects personal tastes and choice.
Nevertheless
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, storing
knowledge
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 on in the Internet has plenty of positives which allow people to store
information
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 permanently. Unlike paper, online
information
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 does not require any physical or chemical maintenance work to preserve it for a long time. It even does not disappear for good.
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, back in the past, we have been through a tremendous loss of valuable and historical books due to the terrible accidents
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 as war, fire, or natural disaster. In
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 regard, people are aware of the significance of storing
information
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 safely and permanently.
Moreover
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, online
information
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 or
knowledge
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 is accessible by everyone and everywhere. All we need to do is just searching the Internet
to look
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looking
 for the
information
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 that we want rather than going to book shop or libraries. It allows us to save physical time and effort to travel and get it. Even though I need a particular
knowledge
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, it is available anytime and anywhere if there is connection with
Internet
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the Internet
.
This
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 easy accessibility to
knowledge
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 can enable us to improve the quality of life. In conclusion, those beauties of storing
knowledge
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 or
information
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 on the Internet
makes
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make
 it possible to live more convenient and effective world.
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