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some people have the same type of job throughout their lifetime,while others prefer to change the type of job they do. discuss why people choose to do both and give your opinion.

#people #type #job #lifetime #change
Growth in
industralization
the development of industry on an extensive scale
industrialization
 has produced
lot
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lots
 of
work
 opportunities.While many employees have
prefernce
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a preference
preference
preferred
preferences
prefers
prefer
 to do
work
 in the same workplace forever
,
Accept space
,
many still tend to prefer rotation in
workplace
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the workplace
.
This
 essay will discuss why it is beneficial to
work
 in
same job but
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the same job, but
the same job but
 why change is
ultimatey
as the end result of a succession or process
ultimately
 superior. Doing
work
 with
same employer
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the same employer
 till
age
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the age
 of retirement can be fruitful in career growth. A long term association at same place fosters a trustee relationship between employer and employee.
For instance
, longevity of time
spend
Suggestion
spends
 at particular place ultimately leads to confidence over
decision making
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the decision making
 of employee rather than reliance on
newcomer
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the newcomer
newcomers
a newcomer
.So, it is easier to get promoted along with
long tenure
Suggestion
the long tenure
 of time. But not everyone needs to progress via
this
 long way and switching jobs can in fact be an extremely positive experience. Supervision of divers
minsets
Suggestion
min sets
 within a team could foster learning curve upwards
.
Accept space
.
For instance
, collaboration with people from different backgrounds.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job security
  • Stability
  • Expertise
  • Mastery
  • Career advancement
  • Personal growth
  • Development
  • Acquiring
  • Skills
  • Knowledge
  • Exploring
  • Career paths
  • Opinion
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