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Many people work long hours, having very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Nowadays, quite a large number of individuals
work
 more than average working hours and
thus
 having a few hours
for
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of
 entertainment. I strongly believe that
this
 phenomenon has more drawbacks than benefits and
this
 essay will outline the disadvantages using statistics from The Times Newspaper. On the one hand, there is ample evidence that bonus
in addition
 to salary is beneficial for both the employee and family. By working extra hours, workers can earn more
money which
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money, which
 eventually upgrades the lifestyle by buying superior things which could not be possible with the savings from the basic salary. Not only upgraded
lifestyle but
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lifestyle, but
also
 it is possible to fulfil the wishes of family members with the extra money.
On the other hand
, despite the benefits of extra earning,
this
 trend has drawback including reduction in
efficiency
. A recent study from The Times Newspaper found that the
efficiency
 to do
work
 reduced by 95% if an employee works more than 15hours on
daily basis
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a daily basis
.
This
 is because of boredom of doing
same
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the same work
work
 in a loop and due to fatigue with lack of proper sleep
as a result
 of doing
work
 for long hours.
Moreover
, family disputes are another down side of long working hours.
This
 is because more
work
 means less time for family and entertainment. Less quality time would bring misunderstanding and lack of care, love for others which will bring tiffs and end with breakage of relationship. According to The Times, 70% of divorces occurred due to quarrels between husband and wife
as a result
 of lack of quality time with each other. To wrap up, I believe that despite the advantage of more money, the drawbacks of reduction in
work
efficiency
 and family disputes are more. So, one
have
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has
 to
work
 to reduce these
down sides
a negative aspect of something that is generally positive
downsides
 to save
relationship
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the relationship
a relationship
 and to increase
work
efficiency
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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