The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart provides information regarding the
people
of Edmonton use
transport
-
car
, LRT, Bus,
Taxi
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and Taxi
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for their travel; and the table
show
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shows
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why
people
use
the
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car
as their
transport
in their city. The
data's
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data
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in both the pie chart and table are calibrated into a percentage.
Overall
, Most
people
prefer a
car
; it made up the most significant
transport
, having almost half of the
overall
percentage: almost more than half of the
people
use
this
transport
for their commute to work. Both
Bus
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Buses
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and
taxi
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taxis
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,
however
, have been used by
very
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the very
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least
people
in
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on
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their journey.
Car
accounted for 45%, becoming the most used
transport
in Edmonton.
This
was followed by LRT with just a 10% difference, having 35%. The
third
position was given to
bus
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buses
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and
taxi
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taxis
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, and both contributed the same proportion of 10%. Moving to the table,
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the Commute
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Commute
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to work is the
reason
placed by more than half of the
people
(55%). The
second
most
reason
which accounted for 45%
in
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of
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Business. There is just a 5% difference between the
reason
for business and taking children to school. Surprisingly,
People
give a
reason
for using a
car
for their purpose of shopping and leisure activities with the same percentage of 15%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, car, transport, reason with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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  • transportation modes
  • car ownership
  • proportion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • transportation habits
  • environmental awareness
  • government policies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • congestion
  • environmental quality
  • future implications
  • adapt
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