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Countries should restrict foreign companies from opening offices and factories in order to protect local businesses. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #companies #offices #factories #businesses
In recent years, as the world
become
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becomes
 a globalised day by day, companies from other countries
also
 increasing proportionally. Some people argue that it should be banned for the sake of production of native
business
 I believe that, restricting foreign companies might help to protect local companies but it should not be banned.
On the other hand
, I believe that local businesses need protecting by the government by. Foreign influences of multinational companies those foreign companies have a lot of capital, experienced employees and consciousness of brand which is
lackage
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packaged
package
 for local businesses, as they sometimes struggle to maintain
minimum quality product
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the minimum quality product
. Native
business
 could not to win by comparing with foreign
business
.
For instance
, McDonald has branches all over the world. If one of the
branch
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branches
 could not profit,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 one is there to cover, unlike local companies.
On the other hand
, in
state
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a state
the state
states
 of becoming conservative nation, countries might emerge effectively with some companies by welcoming Global
coorporation
a business firm whose articles of incorporation have been approved in some state
corporation
. Every company has its own culture, on vision. Local companies
also
 can learn various ways to impress customers and could invest foreign companies. If countries remain
closed they
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closed, they
 might face difficulty in
long term
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the long term
 by staying behind globally and economically. In countries,
although
 countries can protect their
business
 by restricting some companies of foreigners, I
also
 believe that they might lack in globalisation and economic growth by going so.
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