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Some people think that there are things individuals can do to help prevent global climate change, others believe that action by individuals is useless and irrelevant and that it is only governments and large business can make a difference. Discuss both views and opinions.

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People have different views about whether to prevent global warming should be done by individuals or solely the government have much effort to tackle with
this
 issue. Personally, I find the former more convincing, because the public contribution is more relevant. On the one hand, it is believed that the government and businesses can adjust global climate change by doing some affairs.
First
 of all, only the government
have
Suggestion
has
 legislative power and with
this
 way they are able to challenge people to be economically –friendly. If it is not controlled, the results will be insufficient.
Secondly
, global scale conundrums require a large amount of money that the governments and businesses can afford to provide with
such
 massive founds.
On the other hand
, every individual can help to prevent climate change by
doing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
 small contributions which may lead to positive consequences.
For instance
, if people do not throw litter everywhere, it will reduce the amount of waste.
Also
, disposing of waste correctly, which means putting glass, plastic, bottle and paper into individual rubbish bins for recycling may protect the environment from air contamination, leading to lower temperatures.
Furthermore
, reforestation is another way in which people can contribute greatly.
In other words
, planting at least 2trees per year by every adult may reduce CO2 by releasing oxygen.
This
, in
turn will
Accept comma addition
turn, will
 have
positive impact
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a positive impact
 on preventing global climate change. In conclusion, despite having much effort
of
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by
 the governments and businesses for protecting the environment, the public conduct is more relevant and helpful.
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