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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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The graph demonstrates Britain's
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 of passenger transportation, railway routes from 1950 to 2004/5. Overall, Both national
rail
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network
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 and London Underground had similar trends experiencing a dramatic decrease and
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 an increase. Whereas, the light
rail
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 and metro systems underwent a steady rise. The 3 line had fluctuations. At the beginning of the time period, the national
rail
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network
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 had about 25% more passengers than the London Underground.
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, in 1960 the
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's
number
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 of passengers rose by about a 100, and the London Underground remained somewhat constant. From 1960 to 1980, the
number
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 of passengers was continually diminishing in the
network
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 and London Underground with about 650 and 500, respectively at the end of 1980.
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, in the
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 2 decades, the London Underground and the
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network
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 had an approximately similar upward trend with around 1100 and 970 respectively at the end of 2005.
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, the light
rail
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 and metro systems consisted of about 50 passengers while slightly declining in
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 from the 1960s to 1980. After that,
however
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, the light
rail
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 and metro systems had a significant rise to about 100 passengers. It later on decreased slightly, but afterwards, the
number
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 of passengers kept gradually inclining till the end of the time period.
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