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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-tim e work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-tim e work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the data about people who graduated from the United Kingdom's universities in 2008 and do not have full-time work;
students
 are divided into two categories: graduated and
postgraduated
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postgraduate
post graduated
postgraduates
. Graduates \postgraduates Looking from an
overall
 perspective, the majority of
students
 decided to continue
studying
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the studying
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proccess
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process
,
while
 the least proportion of them have started
volintary
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voluntary
voluntarily
 work. Turning to details, roughly 30 000 graduates of the United Kingdom
choosed
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chose
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further
 study, which is the highest index among the other three categories.
Students
 who have got a part-time job or even unemployed compromised 17.735 and 16.235, respectively. The least number of
students
 showed
the
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apply
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(an) interest in voluntary work and presented 3.500
students
. In comparison, about 2 725 postgraduate
student
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students
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 (
students
) from the UK
cintinued
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continued
continue
 their
study
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studies
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.
However
, it is
also
 the highest percentage of
students
 as in the case
with
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of
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 graduates. The lowest one
also
was
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those who showed The number of postgraduate
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students
sudents
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students
 was lower than graduate
students
for
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by
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 about 10 times
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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