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Is it a good idea for university student to have a part- time job?

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Nowadays, more and more students have part
time
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 jobs. Is it a good idea? Maybe it is good or maybe not. But oppositely, I strongly believe that it is ideal for university students to have a
part-
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time
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job
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 of all, part-
time
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job
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 helps students ensure financial issue. Students can earn extra pocket
money
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. With that income, they can pay for daily living and part of tuition.
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, many families are not well-off, their parents have to work hard to provide them an appropriate amount of
money
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.
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, by working, students help to lessen their
familys'
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family's
families
family
 burden, because when students can earn
money
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 by themselves. It means that their parents can save a big sum of
money
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 without working so hard. Someone argues that working-earn
money
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 makes students become materialistic and they will spend less
time
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 for their study. It is maybe true.
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, in the other hand, part-
time
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job
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 will teach them how to manage
time
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 and
money
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 effectively. They value their
time
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 and take advantage of every moment to study. Because students have to work hard to earn some
money
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, they can realize the value of the
money
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 they make - it's hard to earn some
money
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from
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for
 themselves, so they don't want to freely spend
money
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. One more benefit of
part-
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time
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job
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 is that students can get experience of working. Many people said students just can do low- skill
job
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 so the part-
time
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job
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 doesn’t
help them anything
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help them with anything
 in the future. They
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were
have been
 wrong. Even if it is a low-skill
job
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, it still helps students to complete certain skills for future
job
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.
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, to be a waiter or
seller
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a seller
 in a shop can help students to be more self-
confidence
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confident
 and improve their communication skills. Having a part-
time
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job
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 will bring many benefits, so students should get a part-
time
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job
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.
Submitted by Lê Thị Phương Thanh on

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