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The consumption of the world’s resources (oil and water, etc.) is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are causes and solutions?

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These days, the overuse of national resources has become a major crisis around the world.
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 huge concern requires immediate solutions to control
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 over-consumption before it runs out of all resources. Because if
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 happens, all countries will face it and the lives of all people will change.
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 of all, it should be said that the reasons for exploiting these land resources are their consumption in countries. The economies of many countries are completely dependent on these resources. It can be said that more developed countries with stronger economies need these resources more
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 due to the dependence of the economy on these industries and the problem of lack of these resources is more serious in them. The signs of these sources are quite clear in people's lives. Use of oil, fuel, gas, electricity, etc.
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, there are some effective measures which ease the problem of over-consuming earth’s resources.
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 of all, using non-renewable Energies
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 as sun and wind
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 of these sources is an important solution.
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 many countries, electricity is generated from wind. Reducing demand for resources can
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 be an easy way to control
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 crisis.
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, if the price of hybrid cars is affordable, people will turn to these cars and the demand for gasoline will decrease. In fact, finding alternative sources and products is one of the best solutions.
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, it should be said that these resources have always been in high demand in all countries due to the needs of different economies and industries. Using alternative resources and products and instilling the right culture of saving among people can prevent many bad things in the world.
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