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Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and production and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problem does this cause? What could be done to encourage people buy local products

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The given data source illustrates Oil
Production
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 Capacity in
million
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 of barrels per
day
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 in six
countries including
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countries, including
: Iran, Iraq, Kuwait, Qatar, Saudi Arabia and the UAE. Overall, it is clear to see that oil
production
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 capacity increased in all countries during
this
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 20-year period. The most striking feature from the graph is that Saudi Arabia remained and strengthened its position as the major producer. Kuwait and Iraq doubled their
output
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 between 1990 and 2010, with the
production
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 of Kuwait
rising
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rises
is rising
 from 1.8
million
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 barrels per
day
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 (
bpd
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) in 1990 to 3.8 in 2010. Iraq grew from 2
million
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 barrels per
day
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 to 4
million
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 barrels per
day
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 in the same period. Iran
also
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 increased its
output
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 by a slightly smaller amount. After remaining steady at 2.5
million
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bpd
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 from 1990 to 2000, the UAE's
output
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 approached 4.0
million
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bpd
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 in 2010.
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, the figure of Qatar illustrates a downturn
to
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in
 0.8
million
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bpd
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 after a slight rise in 2000. The greatest increase was from Saudi Arabia. In 1990 its
output
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 capacity
at
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of
 8.5
million
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bpd
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 exceeded the combined
production
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 of Iran, Iraq and Kuwait.
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 lead continued with a 75% increase in
production
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 to 14.5
million
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bpd
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 in 2010.
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