Some people believe academic success depends mostly on having a good teacher. Others argue that it is the attitude of the student that matters most. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

After around eighteen years of successful education will make the person to start his professional career and to perform well they need to hard work. There is a school of thought that it is totally subjected to the learner
behavior
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behaviour, however
behaviour however
however
some people argued without the proper guidance from the professor it is difficult to
achieved
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achieve
. In my
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
, a mentor becomes the good example for the learner. To start with,
the younger
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the young
minds are not able judge the right path for their professional career as they are unable to recognize the best skills or interest in them because of
this
reason they need a guider. To put it differently, if the scholars do not know their skills, how will they triumph their profession? To illustrate
this
fact, let’s take the example of the newly research done by the philosopher graduate. They have
analyze
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analysed
analyse
the result of the high school of the city Karachi and concluded that the around eighty percent of the students from the top two-hundred students have attended the college to learn from the experienced tutor.
On the contrary
,
although
guidance is must, the
students
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students'
way of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
also matter
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also matters
. The habit like book reading helps the student to explore the
unhidden
skills which most of the
teacher
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teachers
leave for not considering its importance as
examination point
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the examination point
of view. When the students involve in reading the books, they will not only get the knowledge for the examination but
also
the information which will help them in their future life.
For instance
, the students who actively seek new information are fond of taking guidance from
book
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the book
books
a book
as well rather than dependent on the instructor only.
Hence
, from
above discussion
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the above discussion
it has been
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
. Despite that self-interest of the
schoolchild
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school child
is the key
for
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to
their success; the good
counseling
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
counselling
helped them a lot.
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