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Many students are choosing not to study science in universities.what are the causes for that.what are the effects on the society

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Introduction
Over the recent years, a society has been wearing modern and stylish clothes.
This
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 essay will examine
this
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 tendency.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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,
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,
in the past people
demonstrate
Suggestion
demonstrated
demonstrates
 with different kinds of clothes and
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
 their power, nation, sex. Nowadays, the approach is similar, an individual style is the way to show society personal income level, status, hobbies, workplace.
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, the banks have a special dress code for employees, it is a strong suit for men and long skirts for women. The Google’s rule opposite has
casual dress code
Suggestion
a casual dress code
,
such
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 as jeans, trainers and
t-shirts
a close-fitting pullover shirt
T-shirts
. These differences
provides
Suggestion
provide
 various
attitude
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attitudes
 to customers and employees.
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, the extremely expensive brands
such
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 as Prada, Gucci, and Chanel are appropriate for famous actors and the persons from Forbes.
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, the middle class could be wearing wonderful clothes from Zara or local shops and being stylish without huge payment.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, sometimes clothes are used for making a positive mood and feeling confident.
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, it is not a secret, that an evening dress increase women’s happiness. The young people often wearing modern clothes for convinced, especially when they want to be in a group.
Body paragraph 3
On the other hand
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, production clothes have a negative influence on the environment. The making and
coloring
a digestible substance used to give color to food
colouring
 material pollute water and air.
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, people often change their clothes before they become old for buying clothes from appearing in new collections. Society should think about the environment and try to recycle old clothes or give them to poor people.
Conclusion
In conclusion, every person can wear modern clothes for various goals.

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