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An increasing number of people are changing their job. What do you think are the reason? Do you think it is positive or negative?

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Recently, it has been focused that more employees unwilling to stay at a company. The purpose of
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 phenomenon. One of the most important reasons for people changing jobs is learning more skills. In common, bosses tend to require workers still learning a certain skill and mastering it well, particularly in cooperations, which could make people more efficient at work. So, if someone wants to gain other know-how, changing jobs is a direct and simple approach to expand scope of competence.
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, higher salary is another significant reason. It is
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 interesting and universal situation that many who work for a company several years and keep a good performance, haven’t gained obvious pay increase, even lower than a new colleague who just graduate.
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, other employers would provide high wage, much higher than before, to those people for their experience.
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 essential benefit of changing jobs is finding a right career. It means that switching jobs a few times can help workers finding a career that they like enough to stick with for 10 or 20 years without getting burned out.
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, the founder of Alibaba, a China internet giant,
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, job hopping
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 is negative for relationships. If workers
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 jobs every couple of years, it may be difficult for him to form strong relationships.
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, Strong work relationships in most industries is a recipe that people could be promoted. To summarize, learning more skills or obtaining higher salary may let employees to consider changing their jobs. But based on clear both positive and negative influences, I hold that people should think three times before resigning.
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