There is a public park near where you live.you have heard that the local council wants to sell this park.write a letter to a local newspaper.in your letter introduce yourself describe the importance of the park say what action you will take if the council continues with its plan

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Dear sir My name is Rajwinder and

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am living at 402basant colony Amritsar.

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writing in regards to that you sell Bhagat

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park

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which is near to my house.

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park

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is very important for me and for

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all people.we do walking and jogging in

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park

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morning

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and evening time.

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play

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there.In the

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park

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minimum

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people come to spend their free time with their

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.There is

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greenary

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greenery

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very beneficial for our health.We grow many new plants there.There

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also

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swings for the kids. If it

sell

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for a factory

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we take

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action to save our

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.We will

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of all

community

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.please do not sell

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for a factory.I hope you will

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our request.Thank you. Yours faithfully Rajwinder

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

140 words

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