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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

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Some cities built taller buildings to save their housing
space
, but other
city
's housing by building houses in a wider
space
.
This
 result should be sitting in each bucolic's population and land
space
 amount. In my opinion, the homey with a small
field
 and high population, which can use the create housing areas by providing taller building. The small
field
 of countries protects their ecosystem and regulate the agrarian's infrastructure,
therefore
 necessity the nature
field
 and industrial
field
. The above quick fix can provide the using the small
field
 of
industrial
Suggestion
industry
industries
, and protect the nature
field
 from people's demand.
On the other hand
, the jam of people in the urban area which is the most common reason for the noise, soil, water, and ecosystem pollution,
therefore
 the density of population is important in the country's infrastructure. May be
housing
Suggestion
housed
 by building houses in a wider area of land which solution will be influenced in reducing the urban area pollution. In the results, both of quick fix is the best in suits
city
 and the region, because some
city
 has a small
field
,
therefore
, the
second
 quick fix
not suit
Suggestion
doesn't suit
 in these countries. The
first
 solution will be the best in agriculture developed country's
city
 or large
space
 of the land
city
 because the agriculture and animal husbandry demands the large
space
,
such
 as farmer, cultivate the fodder crops etc.,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban density
  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
  • carbon footprint
  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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