Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing useful for zoo. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

Nowadays, there are many zoos have been placed in my country.
However
, some people think that a
zoo
has no useful purposes.
On the other hand
, disagree with those people because it can educate young children, it provides a habitat for animals, and it makes people feel relaxed. For many reasons, which will be mentioned below the essay.
Firstly
, zoos can make children study better about the animals. Children can learn about
animals not
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animals, not
only from books and TV
programs but
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programs, but
from actually watching them alive and observing them. They can see animals, touch them and even feed them. It is an amazing experience for a child. He gains more knowledge and experience from
this
“communication” with an animal.
Therefore
, they may learn more effectively by the active way.
Secondly
, zoos may be a good habitat for many species, it is
also
a
safe guard
make safe
safeguard
for animals from natural disaster.
Nowadays due
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Nowadays, due
to
global warming huge amount
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the global warming huge amount
of forest and animals are destroyed.
For instance
, the number of polar
beer
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beers
is reduced from the past decade. There is
large amount
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a large amount
of polar bears are
died
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dying
for each year. There are more and more people want to catch or kill
animal
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an animal
the animal
animals
illegally.
This
leads to total destruction of whole species.
Thus
, if people keep the animals in the
zoo
, there may be better for the animals. At some
zoo
, they may have a great environment.
Finally
, people can relax when they come to the
zoo
. After a week, people may get
stress
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stressed
from their work or study. There is very good entertainment for
whole family
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the whole family
. Children are eager to see the animals and they can learn the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of numerous animals. The
zoo
can be the best way
to
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for
them to reduce their stress.
As a result
, at there, it is really beautiful, they not only can meet many great landscapes but
also
feed and touch many animals. In conclusion, I hope that people will build more and more large zoos that have the best environment for many animals to stay and they will let their children go to the
zoo
in order to make they learn better and reduce their stress.
Submitted by bebe Huyền on

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