In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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In the past few years, the old citizen's of Britain have started to move out and living in old age homes with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes The government has to pay for
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. Government paying for these people's welfare is a great thing, but it somehow relives the family of their duty towards their family member only people who are facing financial crisis should be allowed to avail
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family members are deciding to leave their family and homes whatsoever the case is the
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care, affection
and attention a person gets from his or her family
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if due to harsh and unfair circumstances a person is living in
old age home family
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the old age home, family
the old age home family
an old age home family
should pay for his stay at the place
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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