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To be labelled a ‘Work of Art’, a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique. However, over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork and it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled ‘masterpieces ’ whilst true works of art pass unnoticed. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In general, it is a ubiquitous notion that the distinctive feature of modern society is tremendous diversity in any sphere of our life and culture area is not an exception As a matter of fact, nowadays it has become a possibility for some, even entirely mediocre, piece of
art
 to be categorised as a "masterpiece", yet
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 items remain in complete obscurity Basing on my personal knowledge and experience I would like to note that to some extend I agree with
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 statement, but at the same
time
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 I admit that the issue is quite controversial . In
this
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 there is an attempt to summarize the information and make a relevant conclusion
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 on a row of
powerfull
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powerful
 arguments. First of all, the underlying determinant of the case when the popular figures are being glorified
while
 other, more talented artists are discarded, is
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 impact of media and social networks on people's preferences . Much as we try to appreciate extraordinary creatures commonly admitted as "masterpieces" it is worth bearing in mind that today public relations, appearance and popularity seem to deflect our attention.
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God-gifted youngsters nowadays have no chance to be taught
artworks
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 in school because it
considered
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is considered
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 to be
extra-curricular
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an extra-curricular
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 activity . It is a commonly held belief that in the past, there was a bachelor’s course in the arts, but now the importance has been reduced very drastically. I have the examples in abundance when my talented aсquaintances had to give up
art
 and landed into another career
due to
 deprivation of
encouragment
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encouragement
.
On the other hand
, over the past
century
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 there has been a tremendous shifting of preferences, expectations and requirements towards the work of
art
. The wind of the change engulfed the whole society . In general, people derived more freedom in its various aspects
such
 as freedom of expression and freedom of choice. In that
sence
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sense
, it goes without saying that people find adorable the fruits of the labour of the contemporary genius which seem quite ordinary from the common point of view.
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Furthermore
,
qiven
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given
 the huge interest in pieces of
art
 in famous museums, I dare to assume that their creations are still looked at with admiration and
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 of genuine prodigies is mostly celebrated and revered postmortem .
To sum up
, with relevant arguments I would like
to conclude
 that paintings, sculptures and
other form
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 of
art
 labelled a "Work of
art
"
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 a uniqueness, which is completely lacking in present days . At the same time
basing
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 on
evidences
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 from the past when genius artists remained unrecognized I firmly believe that for future generations everything will fall
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its
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place.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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