Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Often there is debate as to whether grandparents give good amenity to the infants or parents should send their toddlers to the

childcare

Suggestion

child care

centres. There is no doubt with grandparent’s

child

feel safe and can make

strong bond whereas

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strong bonds, whereas

strong bonds whereas

a strong bond whereas

centres help youngsters for their overall development. According to me, schools are the better option. There are many advantages for the children who grow up in the supervision of their older parents.

Firstly

, kids can spend more time with their families, make stronger bond and learn good moral values. These values help kids to respect their elders and makes them a good society member.

Secondly

, grandparents better know the likes and dislikes, so they always teach them

accordingly

their interests and makes things easier for them. Other than

this

home environment is always safer as it protects youngsters from bullying.

On the other hand

, childcare centres have its own benefits as centres hire trained staff with higher qualifications, they help kids in their overall progress not academically but physically too. They do different activities in the class so that kids do not feel bored and they grow mentally and physically.

In addition

, in school environment

child

learn how to socialise with their peers and deal the problems like

peers

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peer

pressure.

In addition

, they become more independent as they learn to do their work by themselves. In conclusion, I think schools

helps

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are helping

are helped

have helped

more for the

fully

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full

fullest

fuller

development of the

child

however

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However

, grandparents have its own role for the good

nurture

the essential qualities or characteristics by which something is recognized

nature

of the

child but

Accept comma addition

child, but

there will be few things that

can not

cannot

teach at home so parents should prefer childcare centres.

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Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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