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these daye most people move to other countries. is this positive or negative effect

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Nowadays, most of the people are moving to other nations and it shows its
great
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greatest
 impression anywhere. The cause to migrate from one
place
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 to another is may be due to better job and
good
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better
 lifestyle than their own country. These shows positive as well as negative impact on the culture and society of that nation. Here, I will discuss the reasons and
effect
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the effect
effects
 of the migration in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
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, some folks
leave
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leaves
 their country because they want to get higher studies from other reputed countries so that in future, they can get their desired jobs with tremendous pay scale.
Secondly
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, the
other
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Another
Other
 reason might be they do not feel safe in their own
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place that’s
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place, that’s
 why they choose to migrate to some
place
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 where they will live without danger.
For example
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, from Syria lots of refugees came to Canada as they feel safe in that nation.
However
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, everything has its positive and negative effects.
Firstly
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, when individuals go to some new
place
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, they must face
culture
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cultural
 and language barrier.
In addition
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, people of home country
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also face
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also faces
is also facing
has also faced
 some difficulties due to increasing number of the migrants to their nation
as a
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result there
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result, there
 can be
more competition
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more competitive
 to find a reputed and white
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a band that fits around the neck and is usually folded over
collar
 job. To Recapitulate, I will say there are
plethora
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a plethora
 of causes for the migration of folks
to
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in
 other countries and it will be good for the individuals as they are getting their desired lifestyle in their dream countries but somehow sometimes natives have to go through some difficult situations. But all in all, I will say it is a positive development.
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