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Some people believe that time spent on television, video and computer games can be beneficial to children. Others believe this has negative effects on a child. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is a true fact that many masses think that spending
time
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 on electronic gadgets
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 as, television, video and computer games can be helpful for children while, some other people believe that these thinks take bad impact on children physically and mental
life
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. In
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 essay l will discuss both view with relevant reasons in following paragraphs and describe my own view. There are the lots of reasons of
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 notion, but the
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 and foremost reason is that many people think spending
time
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 on electronic gadgets are more beneficial for children. Many parents think if their
child
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 spends whole day in their house so they are safe from a number of risks. They think their
child
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 always in safe hands and they were can't join any bad company.
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 if children are watching knowledgeable shows on television, they can easily enhance their knowledge and learn lots of new things in their
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.
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, election gadgets are the main sources of distraction in
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child's study
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the child's study
. These think only used for entertainment purposes, so they divert the student's mind from their academic studies as well as these gadgets make children lazy. These gadgets create numerous health and mental level related problems in every
child
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 and these games take bad impact on eyesight. These gadgets not beneficial for studies because some children spent their whole
time
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 on playing video and computer games and etc. So that's why they can't concentrate on their academic studies. To conclude, I am of the opinion that election gadgets are less vital in children's
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 because same games totally wastage of money as well as
time
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. It takes bad impact on student
life
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 and make
child
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 lazy because most of children spending their leisure
time
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 on these gadgets so that's why they can't do other physical activities.
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