The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how fish pies are manufactured from raw materials which are
potatoes
and salmons
.
Overall
there are two production
lines, one for potatoes
and one for salmons
. The potato line
joins the salmon line
at some point and the production
ends at storage or dispatch.
Potatoes
reach the production
line
in
one month after the harvest, Change preposition
apply
then
they are cleaned before they are peeled. After these steps, they are sliced into small longitudinal pieces. Next
, they are boiled in a cauldron and left to cool. As the last
step for this
production
line
, potatoes
are stored until they are added to the salmon production
line
.
Fresh salmons
are used for the fish production
line
, which were
caught in 12 hours or less. Change the verb form
was
Firstly
, salmons
are treated with lemon juice and salted right after. Next
, a steam oven is used for cooking them. Then
, the workers stationed at the fish production
line
remove skins
and bones of cooked Correct article usage
the skins
salmons
. There is an inspector right after
this
step to ensure the salmons
are ready for the next
processes
. After the inspection, peas, prepared sauces and stored Fix the agreement mistake
process
potatoes
from the first production
line
are added to the salmons
. The final products are wrapped by another worker and sent to freezing. There, they are stored until dispatch.Submitted by drsmtcm on
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