The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how fish pies are manufactured from raw materials which are
potatoes
and
salmons
.
Overall
there are two
production
lines, one for
potatoes
and one for
salmons
. The potato
line
joins the salmon
line
at some point and the
production
ends at storage or dispatch.
Potatoes
reach the
production
line
in
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one month after the harvest,
then
they are cleaned before they are peeled. After these steps, they are sliced into small longitudinal pieces.
Next
, they are boiled in a cauldron and left to cool. As the
last
step for
this
production
line
,
potatoes
are stored until they are added to the salmon
production
line
. Fresh
salmons
are used for the fish
production
line
, which
were
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caught in 12 hours or less.
Firstly
,
salmons
are treated with lemon juice and salted right after.
Next
, a steam oven is used for cooking them.
Then
, the workers stationed at the fish
production
line
remove
skins
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and bones of cooked
salmons
. There is an inspector right
after
this
step to ensure the
salmons
are ready for the
next
processes
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. After the inspection, peas, prepared sauces and stored
potatoes
from the first
production
line
are added to the
salmons
. The final products are wrapped by another worker and sent to freezing. There, they are stored until dispatch.
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