Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible,while other argue that it has had a very negative impact discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Today is characterized by the rapid rate of change.
Counties
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Countries
around the world are experiencing dramatic shifts in their
economical
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economic
, social and political structures. Technology and science are becoming as vital concepts of nowadays,
thus
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it influences
to
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in
the
business
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, too, with its advancement. The
business
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tycoons and
business
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corporations dominate in each domain. It is emphasized as demand of
modern world
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the modern world
.
To begin
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with, today is said that all
branch
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branches
of society
is governed
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are governed
by
business
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agents, range
from
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of
food
product
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to geological resources.
Thus
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,
this
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system
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relate
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relates
to marketing which tempts more consumers, cooperating with mass media. It influences
customers’ view
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the customers’ view
that it may stimulate to buy their products. The reason why is that huge
business
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has its own
budget which
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budget, which
afford to advertising their
product
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widely. As well as, they contrive the high qualified condition which people can purchase their
product
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without difficulties. Frequently, they make
performance
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a performance
for glorifying their company’s
system
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and positive aspects. As far as I am concerned, all customers have an inclination to purchase both a good quality and low priced products.
For instance
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, one brand can be
example
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an example
examples
of
this
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argument. Coca-Cola is the largest food industry whose
product
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clientele around the world because it was established true controlling
system
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such
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as advertising,
tasting
the act of subjecting to experimental test in order to determine how well something works
testing
, designing, pricing. Even it is based on red
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
which contrive the feeling of
thirsty
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thirst
(medical fact).
On the other
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hand there
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hand, there
is
peril side
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the perilous side
perilous side
of the coin that large
business
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influence local small
business
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agency which insist
of
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on
half of
economy
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the economy
of the country. These kind of
business
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are effected
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is affected
are affected
by
worldwide
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the worldwide business agency
business
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agency which
widespreading
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their products constantly. The
first
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cause of it is that there is no funding
system
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or relieve tax payments by
government which
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government, which
is possible to attain good quality of running
business
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system
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. Government should be
shoulder onerous financial burden
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a shoulder onerous financial burden
for the local companies as it
gain
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gains
appropriate balance.
Besides
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, local businessmen never take the responsibility of the customers’ safety.
This
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is the reason why consumers
to opt
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opt
large
business
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’s
products
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products, although
although
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it is expensive than locally, if people who possess healthy life style. To conclude, the main rule of
business
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is recruiting people with its quality, appearance and price
by
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of
advertising of mass media. Large
business
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has a tendency to attract people by giving
guaranty
a written assurance that some product or service will be provided or will meet certain specifications
guarantee
for their products and chosen true way of marketing
system
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. For local
business
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should be
supplement
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supplemented
by some
way
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way, such
such
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as government budget or investors that one authorities conduct over advantages of products.
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