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Protecting the environment is the responsibility of the government. Do you agree or disagree?

#environment #responsibility #government
Many of us agree that we must guard against any environmental threats, how ever it has been a Subject of debat whether the government should be responsible or some one else, I believe that authority have to take the responsibility for protecting the environment the are capable of pose penalities against individuals who tend to ruin the nature
further
 more capable of constituting campains to show how could we protect it. Increasing number of people who claim that government is qualified more by establishing penalities against those who try to devastat any part of nature like who cuts the trees in forests which in turn leads to deforestrstion as well as exposing many animal and plant species for being extincit
hence
, authority must hold penalities as make them to pay fine or send them to jail
for instance
 in Uk people mustn't cut trees or even through any rubbish in clean water as well as poaching or they will be responsible for
this
 as disopaying rules.
Further
 more, another way to foster nature loving in people's heart they assist some TV programm on how could we keep it as god created it without any human intervention as
this
 may lead to a serious results especially people have not much expertise to deal with
such
 delicate creatures
hence
, they should try to make the nation aware enough by showing the drawbacks from doing
such
 crimes which will lead to disbalance in the ecosystem. In conclusion,
this
 essay
illustrate
Suggestion
illustrates
 how it's important to protect our environment and how the authority plays an important rule in keeping it safe by constituting rules and
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
rising
increasing in quantity or value
raising
compaigns
a race between candidates for elective office
campaigns
.
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