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nowadays people can buy a large variety of household goods, more than ever before in most countries in the world. is this good or bad development? give your opinion and examples

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In the era of globalization, most of the countries are an interconnected. And the world becomes a global village. In
this
 essay I will state a positive side of development. On the one hand, improvement of infrastructure
such
 as roads, railways, airways and waterways has provided a boost to global trade in between the nations, so the goods are readily available in the market.
Furthermore it’s
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Furthermore, it’s
also
 boosted the manufacturing sector on an immense level;
therefore
, the cost of per product has been reduced and production has increased, and purchasing power capacity has been increased. Due to
this
 condition people are buying large variety of household stocks. On the other, in most of the country’s population purchasing power parity has increased, so that people usually buy that products which are the do not needed.
Moreover sometimes
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Moreover, sometimes
 people are
also
 doing panic shopping at the time of discount or sale, which is really bad sign. In conclusion, purchasing a large variety of goods in not a major problem if household really needed;
however
, if they purchasing goods without any specific requirements so it’s not a positive sign of rational development.
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