Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important for children's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?

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People would argue that painting and drawings are crucial for
student's development
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the student's development
and they
should be added the
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should be added to the
school system as a
complusory
required by rule
compulsory
subject. I completely
argee
be in accord; be in agreement
agree
argue
with the point of view and in the essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will support my opinion On the one hand, there are many benefits bring to young people when they start to learn
art
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the art
. Scientist demonstrates that art will help
increase our
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increase, our
creative
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creativity
and imaginable capacities.
Moreover
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, feeling's people can be
freedom
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free
freed
to express through pictures, songs, poets without limiting by words.
For example
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, Child
pyschologist
a scientist trained in psychology
psychologist
use painting to clearly understand children's thought and expression which they can not
performance
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perform
. We can easily find
chidrens'
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child's
children
children's
potenial
existing in possibility
potential
talents to
nuture
help develop, help grow
nurture
neuter
them and create many
opputurnities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
to develop.
On the other hand
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,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Visual-spatial skills
  • Fine motor skills
  • Emotional expression
  • Creative thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Cultural awareness
  • Historical context
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Teamwork
  • Collaboration
  • Self-esteem
  • Sense of accomplishment
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