Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

In the contemporary era, Even though adolescents spend their
considerale
large or relatively large in number or amount or extent or degree
considerable
deal of time by watching
television
, they cannot learn that much from it. In fact,
this
cannot replace the book as a learning tool. Personally
,
Accept space
,
I strongly agree that even though there are a plethora benefits for teenagers by watching
television
, there are a lot of disadvantages for children- teenagers can easily divert; improper content telecasting.
First
and foremost, Not only educational
programs but
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programs, but
also
unwanted shows- dance, stand-up comedy telecasted on
television
.
This
diverts the teenagers from their studies. Even there are some channels that show useful programs- solar system exploration on the National geography channel;
however
, there will be some ads which really distract students. So people cannot able to focus properly
in
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on
their studies. A real example- My cousin who studying the 10th
standared
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standard
prefers
watch
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to watch
watching
educational videos on the Discovery channel. During the break time, he switched to entertainment channels
such
as Sun Music and started to hear the songs despite continuing his studies.
Furthermore
, the content of the programs is telecasting in the
television
, which is not proved by any educational authorities. So, there are some chances where adolescents understand the concept in
wrong way
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the wrong way
a wrong way
.
In contrast
, Books are written by famous and popular authors and students can learn in the proper way.
For
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To
exemplify, in my hometown, one of the students got failed in the public examination because of
refering
make reference to
referring
refereeing
the theory on
television
instead
of books. In
conclude
Suggestion
concluding
,
television
cannot be alternative for books with the term of learning tools even though it offers numerous benefits for students.
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