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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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In the contemporary era, Even though adolescents spend their
considerale
large or relatively large in number or amount or extent or degree
considerable
 deal of time by watching
television
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, they cannot learn that much from it. In fact,
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 cannot replace the book as a learning tool. Personally
,
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,
 I strongly agree that even though there are a plethora benefits for teenagers by watching
television
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, there are a lot of disadvantages for children- teenagers can easily divert; improper content telecasting.
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 and foremost, Not only educational
programs but
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programs, but
also
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 unwanted shows- dance, stand-up comedy telecasted on
television
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.
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 diverts the teenagers from their studies. Even there are some channels that show useful programs- solar system exploration on the National geography channel;
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, there will be some ads which really distract students. So people cannot able to focus properly
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on
 their studies. A real example- My cousin who studying the 10th
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a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standard
 prefers
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to watch
watching
 educational videos on the Discovery channel. During the break time, he switched to entertainment channels
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 as Sun Music and started to hear the songs despite continuing his studies.
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, the content of the programs is telecasting in the
television
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, which is not proved by any educational authorities. So, there are some chances where adolescents understand the concept in
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the wrong way
a wrong way
.
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, Books are written by famous and popular authors and students can learn in the proper way.
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 exemplify, in my hometown, one of the students got failed in the public examination because of
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make reference to
referring
refereeing
 the theory on
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instead
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 of books. In
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concluding
,
television
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 cannot be alternative for books with the term of learning tools even though it offers numerous benefits for students.
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