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Do you feel the effects of tourism are more positive or negative for the host country?

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Introduction
In the era of
globalisaton
growth to a global or worldwide scale
globalization
globalisation
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tourism is becoming an increasing trend all over the world.It is strongly felt that it has many benefits as well as drawbacks.
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most people intrude into the
country
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 with a detrimental disease which brings about plenty of troubles into the
host
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country
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it is thought by many that it ties completely a strong relationship with other countries when you try to
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 a great hospitality and treating them in a good manner.I will describe these why it is so effective for the
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Firstly
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it is so common to see if you travel to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
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 for
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 so as to enjoy the visual benefits of
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 sightseeing places, can easily be guided by the aid of
guide
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a guide
the guide
 in the
host
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country
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This
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 means that they
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treat
trourists
a radical who employs terror as a political weapon; usually organizes with other terrorists in small cells; often uses religion as a cover for terrorist activities
terrorists
tourists
 like being in a friendly way or just explained in detail.To illustrate
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when visitors go to entertaining places or historical places they do not realize which things were in use of in ancient times, and
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this
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Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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Having
showed
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shown
such
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 sights in an efficient way
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they begin understanding the cultures
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traditions of other and being aware of their hospitality as if it is imprinted an unforgettable impression
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on
 their head.
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some people want to know the origin of something where it comes from,
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 as traditional clothes how they are
weaved
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woven
 in
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country
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this
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it really makes an interesting point to them.
Conclusion
To sum up
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those are undeniable that make a robust ally of
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host
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the host country
country
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 by guest state.
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it maintains the relations they interact via visiting each other.For that reason, by opening tourism doors to every guest
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we will make a huge improvement to their outlooks
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