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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

#people #cities #face #life #government #move #towns
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Nowadays, many people choose to live in the cities because the several opportunities offered for a better
life
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. Despite
this
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, individuals can find many drawbacks living in a metropolis. I believe that
government
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the government
 should facilitate the migration of citizens to hinterland area and
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 would help to reduce some problematic situations. As far as I know, criminality is directly proportionate to the dimension of the
city
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. Much bigger is the
city
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 more higher is the risk to face delinquents.
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, is easy being robbed in downtown not only during the
night but
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night, but
also
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 during daytime, surrounded by a lot of people.
Moreover
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, living in a metropolis
require
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requires
 a high cost of
life
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.
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, the pollution caused by vehicles and in turn is responsible of many respiratory diseases. As I mentioned before, people living in big cities have to face many problems in everyday
life
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.
Government
Suggestion
The government
 should improve the quality of
life
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 of own residents easing people to live better their lives. Several actions should be taken by government,
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example provide
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example, provide
 new and more convenient solutions for families in the countryside which would help them in reducing the cost of
life
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.
Government
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The government
 could enforce police department to keep under control criminality. Another task could be the reduction the traffic in the
city
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 with rotation of particular vehicles or banned the old cars which cause more pollution. We are living in a 21st century where people have many modern problems to face with. Personally, I think some
city
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 residents should move to regional towns so that they can reduce the issues. The quality of
life
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 could improve in the near future if we made the right decisions.
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