In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Schools have always been an important part of children's life. Nowadays
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many schools are facing bad attitude of students towards education and teachers. According to me,
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increasing academic competition and movies are the major causes of student's rude behaviour, friendly environment and healthy competition in schools can avoid these issues.
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, schools are becoming more academic oriented rather than focusing on the student's hobbies and interests. Most of the students are keen on extracurricular and find academic subjects like Maths, Science and so on least fascinating.
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, these students excel in other activities.
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, lacks in their academics.
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children's who like studying
score
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scores
good marks and are always more appreciated.
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the students who perform
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poorly
in studies get
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and behave in
bad manner
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a bad manner
the bad manner
. To overcome these, teachers should give equal importance to other activities rather than concentrating
on academics only
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only on academics
. Every
children
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child
should be praised for their uniqueness and qualities.
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, movies have become a prominent part to communicate ideas. In many of the films, protagonists mock mentors and schools and
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result some
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result, some
students try to
immitate
reproduce someone's behavior or looks
imitate
these actors.
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movies mentors
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movies, mentors
have given
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less importance
which influences youngsters to disrespect their teachers. To solve
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movies should promote education and positive behaviour. To recapitulate,
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the rise
in competition and violent movies are exacerbating
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students'
student's
student
perspective towards teachers.
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, changes should be
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education system
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the education system
education systems
and film industries to improve children's behaviour.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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