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information on the percentage of people who went to the movies in the United Kingdom between 1990 and 2010

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The given line graph illustrates information on the percentage of people who went to the movies in the United Kingdom between 1990 and 2010. The people's attendance is divided into four different
age
 groups. Overall, younger people seemed to, and are predicted to, be more active in movie going than their older counterparts.
However
, all four
age
 groups showed a gradual increase in attendance numbers during the given period, except for a slight drop between 1995 and 2000. To be specific, a larger percentage of people between the ages of 24 and 34 went to, and are expected to, go to the cinema than those in any other
age
 group. Approximately 51% of the respondents from
this
age
 group are expected to attend movies in 2010 compared with only 38% in 1990. Even in the group that had the smallest number of
movie goers
someone who goes to see movies
moviegoers
, those between the ages of 44 and 54, there was an increase of 6% in their attendance.
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