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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some advocate the fact that
job
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 satisfaction plays a crucial role in people's business and career.
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, other people reject
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 statement,
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, they prefer working in a stable business.
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, both sides have enough reasons to support their notion, in my opinion, people would be happy when they do what they want. On the one hand,
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 security is important for the people who should take care of their family which is considered to the constant salary.
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, long life employment offers peaceful and stress free life, for
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 reason a person can find the time to do his other hobbies and interests, like listening to music, travelling, shopping and so on. With the help of a permanent
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, individuals can can enjoy their life and remain financially secure and satisfied.
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, if the human doesn't satisfy or enjoy his business, it is absolutely effected to his future career. Actually, the work, which is done with pleasure, is always overvalued by the employer, because the employees do
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 task not only for their benefits, but
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 the authority of companies.
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, my sister works in a small company as a secretary, Her
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 duties are sending or delivering letters, responding to calls, working with documents and other tiny things.
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, she doesn't get much salary, she submits her work heartily
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in order to get enjoyment. In conclusion, there exist reasonable bases to justify their notions on both sides,
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, I consider that people should gain a lot of satisfaction from their occupation for achieving their purpose.
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