The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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, a public
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which was
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plans we can see the transformations from 1920 to today ,
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entrances
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unchanged. in 1920, the centre of the
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was a fountain and three rose
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garden
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located at the corners. Alow a larger square area of
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rose
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replaced the fountain with seats around it as
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another one at the northwest corner was kept. Another significant change
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that the stage for musicians was refurbished to
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amphitheatre for concerts.
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, seats around the stage were honed and now
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central rose
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. the east part of
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park
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received
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design.
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and a pond for water plants were transformed into a cafe and children's play area, respectively. A previous glasshouse now become a water feature with
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entrance underground car
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constructed beside it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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