Some people think that children would benefit if they attend nursery school before primary school while some people think that children should stay all day with their families. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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education is a highly debated topic around the globe nowadays.
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is believed by majority that kids will be benefited more if attending at nursery
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prior to basic schooling.
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some believe that youngsters can gain a
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by staying at
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rather than joining
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the school
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to learn some activity and being social with many. On the one hand, admittedly
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cradle of the mother is the
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place of training for a kid.Adolescents learn a
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by staying at
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with parents, namely basic milestones of life smile
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walking sitting crawling.
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it is the emotional attachment from parents that children learn a number of activities from
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a recent survey done the student of Karachi university showed that children raised at
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are more groomed and intelligent than those who joined
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at a very early stage.Resultantly
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homely environment contributes a
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in character building and giving
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to youngsters.
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however
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attending at nursery
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is far superior than staying at
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as it has an abundance of benefits in many ways
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Firstly
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socialization of kids with another one attribute
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to kids in the playrooms
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child gain a variety of knowledge from teachers
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play based books
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and games at
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consider it beneficial for kids in terms of grooming and
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and character building as moral values are taught at
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the child gains a
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by visiting at
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rather staying at
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. To conclude
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taking into account the benefits of staying at
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there are plethora benefits in a homely environment
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attending
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outweigh the advantages in terms of social activity
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learning new things and
confidence
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building.
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