Some people think that children would benefit if they attend nursery school before primary school while some people think that children should stay all day with their families. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

children
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Children
education is a highly debated topic around the globe nowadays.
it
Suggestion
It
is believed by majority that kids will be benefited more if attending at nursery
school
prior to basic schooling.
However
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,
some believe that youngsters can gain a
lot
by staying at
home
rather than joining
school
Suggestion
the school
.I consider it a very healthy activity if kids visit
school
to learn some activity and being social with many. On the one hand, admittedly
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cradle of the mother is the
first
place of training for a kid.Adolescents learn a
lot
by staying at
home
with parents, namely basic milestones of life smile
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walking sitting crawling.
Hence
it is the emotional attachment from parents that children learn a number of activities from
home
.
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For example
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a recent survey done the student of Karachi university showed that children raised at
home
are more groomed and intelligent than those who joined
school
at a very early stage.Resultantly
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homely environment contributes a
lot
in character building and giving
confidence
to youngsters.
On the other hand
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,
however
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,
attending at nursery
school
is far superior than staying at
home
as it has an abundance of benefits in many ways
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.
Firstly
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socialization of kids with another one attribute
confidence
to kids in the playrooms
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Secondly
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child gain a variety of knowledge from teachers
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play based books
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and games at
school
.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
consider it beneficial for kids in terms of grooming and
confidence
and character building as moral values are taught at
school
.
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.
Consequently
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the child gains a
lot
by visiting at
school
rather staying at
home
. To conclude
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taking into account the benefits of staying at
home
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there are plethora benefits in a homely environment
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,
however
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attending
at
the products of human creativity; works of art collectively
art
school
outweigh the advantages in terms of social activity
,
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,
learning new things and
confidence
building.
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