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Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?

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the particular occupation for which you are trained
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 growth;
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, they can develop ideas and giving an opinion more rationally.Urban areas are growing rapid pace in all over the world,
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 it’s a very wise decision for parents to a raise a child in a city. In
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 essay, I firmly agree with the author. Children who grow up in urban areas are more mature at a time of career selection.
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, children can easily select the carrier e.g. Music instruments, libraries, museums, zoos, data science etc. In conclusion, children grow up in big cities can be more intelligent, rational and easily handle the situations of a real world.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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