Any leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion will accomplish little. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take.

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During the course of social development, the
leaders
’ decisive plays an indispensable role in achieving or even the prosperity of the public. It is generally believed that any leader, who can be susceptible to the changes from popular opinion, is more likely to have limited accomplishments. Personally, I completely disagree with
this
view because of the detailed explanations below. Primarily, some people argue that
leaders
are representatives of the vast majority of voters, which means that their
decisions
reflect the needs and aspirations of massive individuals.
However
, I believe
this
to be a very shortsighted point of view. Individual, who
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a
leader
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, is expected to make legitimate
decisions
based on their intellectual ability and practical experience.
For instance
, Vietnam successfully prevented
Covid-19
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pandemic
due to
strict quarantine
regulation
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from Vietnam’s authorities, which most people used to oppose.
This
example
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asserts that
leaders
’ decision has a profound impact on
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public life. From my perspective,
leaders
cannot totally obey popular opinions
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but should strike a balance between popular opinions and all other concerns.
Thus
,
leaders
can consult widely and openly among their communities to ensure that their
decisions
are extremely comprehensive.
Besides
, maintaining their ideas
also
alleviate
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the difficulties that
leaders
have to face in order to satisfy people who have differing views. If they identified the most priority issues in their society, they would make feasible
decisions
.
This
leads to these considerable improvements,
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not only for their society
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but their own as well.  In conclusion,
leaders
can integrate their
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with the public’s voice to guarantee the benefits of the public, which
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charisma
leaders
.
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Strong use of specific examples to support arguments. Ensure each point connects clearly to the main argument.
coherence and cohesion
Maintain a clear logical structure in each paragraph. Use transition words to connect ideas more smoothly.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • steadfast
  • principles
  • undermine
  • credibility
  • adaptive
  • unrest
  • consensus
  • democratic societies
  • thoughtful consideration
  • stance
  • policies
  • short-term gains
  • progress
  • visionary
  • bending to the whims
  • beliefs
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