Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

These days, skills and professionalism are favoured at

workplace

Suggestion

the workplace

. While other people's perspectives are that education is crucial for many countries. I personally believe that the benefits will absolutely outweigh the drawbacks. They both

depends

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depend

on the company, whether they valued education or skills. The main benefit is that having experiences

also takes

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also take

a major part of having the opportunity to get into a company.

For example

, most workplaces will choose those who have had

work

with others and have skills

such

as volunteering at an event.

This

can help them find their specific future prospects.

On the other hand

this

might affect the students who

work

hard for their school mentally. Some might not have time for participating

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any event.

This

can make them feel

discourage

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discouraged

. In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages with valuing between experience and knowledge at workplaces. In my opinion, skills are vital for

work

, it prepares you for what you will face when you

work

with others.

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advantages
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experience
knowledge
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