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It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures. We can learn from books, films and internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#travel #places #cultures #books #films #internet
Nowadays, people are
more easy
Suggestion
easier
 to explore the
life
 and culture of another country by using
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
 and reading books. From my
persional
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
 perspective,
however
, I believe that travelling will be the best way to obtain knowledge of the
life
 and culture. One of the reasons why
vistting
the activity of making visits
visiting
 other countries can help people learn the
life
 and new
traditons
an inherited pattern of thought or action
traditions
tradition
. In the other words, visit will have the real experience, which helps them expand their knowledge that are not mentioned in any books or websites.
For example
, tourists who went to Korea will have
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to wear their traditional clothing – Hanbok and enjoyed Korea cuisine that were changed when
entegrating
the action of incorporating a racial or religious group into a community
integrating
integration
 into other nations.
Moreover
, if people opt for travelling, they will able to discover new
informations
a message received and understood
information
 that might not be posted on any online links. On the other hands, since people cannot acquire all knowledges which were not
wrotten
set down in writing in any of various ways
written
writing
 in books.
Hence
, they will forget a long time later. People are easy to memorize the
informations
a message received and understood
information
 by exchanging.
This
 means that travelling makes people communicate to ask others and learn from the community
direatly
without deviation
directly
 will help them to understand and have a long memory. In
conclussion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
,
although
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
 and books are convenient for people to access to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 culture and learn the real
life
, it displays a part of the knowledge that we need. If we want to learn more and have a real experience, we ought to travel and visit other countries
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