Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion.

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years discuss about how to preserve cultural traditions has become a heated topic. It is the improvement of the
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potential that gives the country many opportunities. Nowadays
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is the main part of the
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country's
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. Thanks to
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many social spheres are developing, infrastructure is improving, capital inflow increases, but in spite of these advantages, it is often argued that cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as money-making
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attractions whilst others disagree and think that it is the only method to save
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traditions in the world today.
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essay will discuss why I do not agree that cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as
money-making
the act of making money (and accumulating wealth)
moneymaking
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attractions.
Tourism
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is the backbone of any country’s
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and every country does its effort to attract tourists.
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, lately, Uzbekistan has been diligently developing the
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sector
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and is making more efforts to attract tourists precisely through its historical heritage. We should make these cultural traditions more attractive for
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, because we need tourists. And some people think that
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kind of actives
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is destroyed
cultural traditions. But we should not to forget that cultural traditions more deeply in our life and superficial changes cannot harm them.
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versa through these cultural traditions we should attract more tourists because
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potential is the part of
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the service sector
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.
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we see in
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developing
countries exactly service
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is the main locomotive of
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economy
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the economy
. In recent years, Uzbekistan is moving from a manufacturing
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to a service
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commodified
  • Authenticity
  • Cultural misunderstanding
  • Over-commercialization
  • Staged authenticity
  • Economic benefits
  • Cultural preservation
  • Cultural exchange
  • Cultural commodification
  • Tourist expectations
  • Financial support
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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