It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent to do agree or disagree ?

Some people argue that providing tertiary
education
for a high percentage of teenagers is impossible and useless. From my perspective, I partly
argee
be in accord; be in agreement
agree
with these ideas will outline some reasons in
this
essay.
Firstly
, having a bachelor degree no longer play an
interal
existing as an essential constituent or characteristic
integral
part
to
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in
the future career of young people, even in
this
modern and
knowledge-base
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knowledge-based
society. In many countries, vocational
school
has become a better choice for teenagers who have graduated college, which offer cheaper
school
fees as well as job security when they complete the courses. It’s time-saving for young people to finish their study stage and start to earn money in order to support
family
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the family
a family
,
instead
of spending at least 3 or 4 years in order to pursue a
university
degree.
Moreover
, if everyone could
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
the
university
, it would create pressure on government funds for
education
and workforce like professors, tutors,… which is harmful to the national economy.
This
is because
university
graduates are not willing to apply the job and receive
salary
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a salary
which is not commensurate with their quality.
Secondly
, I think it’s possible to open the opportunity for a high percentage of young people to access tertiary
education
, which mean that more and more private and public universities have to be opened. In Vietnam, the number of fresh-graduate teachers and professors who cannot find the job due to the lack of
school
and
university
is beyond the alert level, especially after the COVID – 19 pandemic. By
organzing
create (as an entity)
organizing
organising
new universities, jobless rate as well as
demanding
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demands
for entering
university
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the university
of young people will be
solved
rescued; especially from the power and consequences of sin
saved
and tertiary
education
in that country will be improved, which attracts more foreign students.
Furthermore
, parents who have
desire
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a desire
for their children to apply private
university
are commonly rich and willing to afford
school
fees which cost an arm and a leg. In conclusion, I believe that it’s unnecessary to provide the high proportion of young people with tertiary
education
, but in fact, most of the government in the world can open up the change for all young people to access
high
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higher
education
.
Submitted by Kha Nguyễn Trung on

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