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Nowadays children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some people think that activities are not good for a child’s mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, there have been immense advances of
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 and video games in most aspects of people’s lives, especially in children’s development.
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, I would believe that spending too much
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 to watch
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 and play video games could
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 a negative impact on child’s mental health.
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 of all, by binge-watching
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 and playing video games most
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, it makes kids could have no
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 for social interaction. In fact, mental health of child relies on a whole range of factors, including outdoor activities
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 as doing physical exercise and playing with other children which are essential for a healthy development.
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, Spending a lot of
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 in front of a computer or
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 screen limits a child
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 for
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 activities and makes them increasingly isolated from the real world.
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 more importantly, though, younger children cannot concentrate for an extended
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 span without breaks. Watching
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 or playing computer games for many hours can hurt their ability to concentrate on their homework or a book later on.
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, It is an undeniable fact that a number of mind games or science programs allow kids to use their mind effectively to win the game, broaden horizons and improve their creative skills, they could not develop their mindset without concentrating ability.
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, while
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 programs and computer games are beneficial in the short term, its long-term effects are generally negative All things considered, there are many reasons why parents are well advised to monitor their children use of
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 and computers closely. Especially younger children should be guided to spend their
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 in active and healthy ways.
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