Some people believe that charity organizations should give aid to those in greatest need, wherever they live. Some people believe that charity organizations should concentrate on helping people who live in own country instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there

are

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a significant amount of

charity

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charitable

organizations are willing to help others.Because of that, people disagree about whether charity organizations should give assistance to the people in greatest

need no

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matter where they live or just focus on the domestic citizens. Personally, I side with the latter. On the one hand, it is

reasonable for quite

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quite reasonable for

a lot of citizens to support charities to help people suffering abroad. Because we have to admit that there are still too many

under-developed

relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply

underdeveloped

areas with extremely poor life conditions all over the world which really need other organizations or countries to help them. To be more specific, Even some countries are still in a period of chaos or war, so it is absolutely not possible for them to get rid of poverty without anyone’s support.

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, concentrating on people in our own country seems more sensible. As we all know, because we have a better understanding of our own country’s poor conditions than foreigners, so helping domestic people is more efficient for a local charity

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And we have to admit the fact that not all organizations have capacity to help the people outside the nation. So it is likely that helping foreigners in greater need seems to be within sight but is actually beyond reach. In a word, I believe that concentrating on domestic poor people for most of the organizations is definitely better, but there are still some big and international charities which should undertake more responsibility on

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. In

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way not only can some people abroad obtain assistance, but

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some charities can be

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more efficient in helping

other people.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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charity organizations
aid
greatest need
equality
fair distribution
resources
universal value
compassion
humanitarianism
global stability
economic growth
local needs
national unity
quality of life
social cohesion
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Some people believe that charity organizations should give aid to those in greatest need, wherever they live. Some people believe that charity organizations should concentrate on helping people who live in own country instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Governments should focus more on preventing crime than on other issues such as healthcare and education. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

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These days people are living in their 90s and beyond. As a result, there is increasing concern about care of the elderly. Do you think it is the responsiblity of the family to take care of their elderly member or should the government be held responsible?

It is predicted that robots are going to become increasingly important in our lives. How could robots be used in the future? Will this development be a positive or a negative development?