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Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. Given time, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#technology #world #time #teacher #classroom
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We are very well aware of the
technogy which
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technology, which
technology which
 is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world
today but
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today, but
 there are few methods like teaching in the
classroom
 has its own advantages over technology
.
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in
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on
this
 topic. As we all have
very tight schedule
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a very tight schedule
 and we want everything to be served
infront
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in front
 of us without going to the place.
Moreover with
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Moreover, with
 a click of a button we can learn several things on our mobile, computer, television
.
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 Though with
this
 method of learning we get different body pain sitting at one place but still it is being preferred as everything is automatic and saves our time
.
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 Going to school
,
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,
college and learning from
teacher
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a teacher
teachers
the teacher
 in the
classroom
is
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has been
 old method yet full of fun
.
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 Not only the
teacher
 teaches but there will interactive conversations amongst students and
teacher
.
Moreover
, healthy discussions will be followed in each session of
classroom
.
This
 adds to bodily movement and exercise.
However
,
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,
classroom
 has its own discipline and students try to learn to maintain the same. The only disadvantage is that we have to commute to
th
definite article
the
classroom
 which sometimes takes time
.
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 In conclusion
,
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,
 it is hard to say that technology is replacing the
teacher
 in the
classroom
 because both have its own positives and negatives. Younger kids who are not given internet mostly prefer going to school for
classroom
 studies.
Moreover
,
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,
 it is based on individual work load which decides
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the use
 of technology or
classroom
 study.
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