Some people feel that young people face more pressure today than the equivalent age groups did in previous generations. Others think they have a much easier life than their parents did. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Obviously, various generations have
own
problems and difficulties. Correct pronoun usage
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some people
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of
nowadays encounter more stress than equivalent age Change preposition
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people
did in the past. However
, some people
think that they have a much easier life than previous
generation did. In Change the article
the previous
this
essay
I will discuss both sides and present my view.
Generally, 30 years ago, the older generation, would have never Add a comma
essay,
imagine
the impact of the internet Change the verb form
imagined
in
our lives. Fortunately, we can have all the information that we need with the help of the Change preposition
on
internet
. Advanced technology has made life more comfortable by providing the best medical treatments, free education, communication solutions, Capitalize word
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thousands
of gadgets to simplify our daily tasks. Correct word choice
and thousands
For instance
, students in the late 80's had
not any educational resources except books from schools, but nowadays Verb problem
did
people
gain
more opportunities.
Verb problem
have
On the other hand
, reaching greater achievements requires greater obstackles
, which means Correct your spelling
obstacles
people
can only expect more pressure to get things done, to be efficient, to
improve what they have already achieved. Youngsters feel the demand to be better in every aspect of their lives. Since they have now more access, they are very informed and tend to make Correct word choice
and to
desicions
by themselves. Correct your spelling
decisions
This
ambitions lead to a Change the determiner
These
highly
competition between them. A good Change the adverb
high
examples
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are
various competitions at school, which Correct subject-verb agreement
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are
demand more Unnecessary verb
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informations
from huge sources and ability.
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pieces of information
conclution
, I think Correct your spelling
conclusion
people
should not ignore the problems of equivalent aged
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equivalent-aged
people
in the past and today’s generations. Different people
face with
various difficulties, which require more patience and strength.Change preposition
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The essay addresses the topic, but the response is not fully developed. The arguments are somewhat unclear and lack depth. More specific examples and details are needed to support the points effectively.
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The introduction and conclusion are present, but they lack clarity and do not effectively set up or summarize the essay. The logical structure is somewhat evident, but the essay could benefit from clearer transitions and a more cohesive organization of ideas.
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